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some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #growth #hunger #poverty #environment
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It is believed by many that starvation and weak financial conditions can only be tackled by the
growth
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 of
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economy
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the economy
, not leaving
other's view
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the other's view
 that rising
economy
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 is playing
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 role in depleting the environment
,
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,
which make people to criticizing it. I opine that,
although
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, in some ways growing
economy
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 is
illtreating
clarify by giving an example of
illustrating
ill treating
ill-treating
 the environment,
this
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growth
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 rate is necessary to
make
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Make
 some sections free from poverty and enabling them to meet their basic necessity of food. On one hand,
growth
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 of
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economy
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the economy
 is leading to destroying the natural environment in many ways. The one
such
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 problem could be about increasing manufacturing of goods, which, not only, leaves the waste materials, but
also
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, includes use of plastic
for
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in
 their packaging, which is hazardous for surroundings; as it do non biodegradable kind of waste. The possible
example could
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example, could
 be of USA, the highest
economy
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 in the entire world, where 78℅ of rubbish is produced in industries, data taken from a survey hosted in 2000 there.
On the other hand
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, there are developing nations, where some people are still surviving for meeting their fundamental needs due to the poor economic situations.
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, if a country has
good gross domestic product
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a good gross domestic product
, it will indirectly
benefits
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benefit
 the weak sections of the society; as in that
situations
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situation
 due to more earnings, governments can help poorer sections to stand up and improving their standards. In the light of above argument, it is evident to conclude that, by taking proper measures towards control of pollution, the benefits of
well
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good
 economic
growth
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 can be availed for the prosperity of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
.
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