Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art is a powerful form of communication and have has become (is) an indispensable part of human civilization. Many argue that artists‘

freedom

should be restricted require

freedom

to a certain extent to be creative whereas others believe that without complete

freedom

of expression an

artist

will not be able to express their his creativity fully (whereas demands that the ideas should be opposite.). In my opinion, while

freedom

of expression is important, art must be censored if it contains elements that hurt cultural and religious believes beliefs or instill social and political unrest.

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Though the introduction is well structured, it contains several grammatical and lexical resource mistakes. The opinion is clearly expressed.) Admittedly, an

artist

plays a crucial role in the development of our

society

by giving us enormous (enormous is used with a measurable noun. Enormous wealth. Not with ideas) novel (

new

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n

) ideas, opinions and criticisms in the form of pictures, writing, music or films.

Society

can use art and take the values from it to develop a better

society

and helps to overcome cultural and linguistic boundaries (

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sentence should offer an explanation

to

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of

the previous idea.

For instance

: Artists use their imagination to write novels that later inspire movies, and some science fiction books and movies give creative ideas to scientists.).

Moreover

, artistic

freedom

helps to criticize new decisions and changes made by the government in a healthy way and can (Parallelism: criticize should be parallel to suggest.)

suggest

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Suggest

improvements.

For instance

, eminent artists

such

as Leonardo Da Vinci and Pablo Picasso have made valuable contributions to the development of

world

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the world

(HOW?

Ideally

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Ideally, this

this

sentence should be an explanation of the

criticism

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critical

point.).

On the other hand

, a total

freedom

without any restriction can adversely affect the

society

by hurting cultural and religious sentiments of people. To elaborate, there are many instances

were

In or at or to what place

where

painters have created God’s and deities in a way which hurt various religions.

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I’m sure you can elaborate

this

point with an example.) Another point to consider is that it unrestricted creative expression can even

creates

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create

create social tension and political unrest. When an

artist

expresses his view in a way that that hurts a particular community or a political party, it can lead to communal riots and political instability.

For example

, recently in India when film Padmavat was released which is a story based on Rajput community in India, it instigated communal riots and violence.

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For instance

, recently a famous Indian director created a movie Padmavat, which allegedly contained some scenes objectionable

to

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of

a specific community and

this

led to minor clashes in various parts of North India.) Following

it

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

censorship board

banned it’s

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banned, it’s

its release in certain part of the country to restore peace across the nation.

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Though both ideas are well explained, idea 1 could have been better expressed with an example.) To conclude, it is an undeniable fact that creative

artist

play

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plays

a principal role in the development of the

society

and artistic

freedom

is the fundamental human right.

However

,

government

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the government

should control arts that hurt religious and cultural sentiments of people in order to maintain peace and harmony among various sections of

society

.