Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects,like philosophy and history,and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment .To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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For the past 50 years

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it seems that

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there is an increment in tertiary education fees and at the same time the

job

opportunities for graduates are decreasing.These

phenomenon

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phenomena

have created some dilemma in some people’s mind and they opine that

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it is better not to teach

soft

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softer

subjects

such

as arts at university and priority should be given for vocational training

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which facilitates more possibilities of employment.

However

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I assume that

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it is not wise to ban subjects

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philosophy and history at universities because of its benefits and influence on

students

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students'

student's

character. It is undeniable that

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arts play

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arts, play

a pivotal role in the development of students.It not only aids them in problem

solving but improve

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solving, but also improve

solving but also improve

also

their critical and analytical thinking

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which is a crucial factor in their later

life

For instance

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those who majored in art subjects

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learn how to control their emotions and in that way they are able to lead a stress free

life

.Admittedly, in order to sustain in

this

competitive world, we need a peaceful environment.The impact of art

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our

life

is as important as a healthy diet and

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

.That means

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once the student is free from stress and knows how to manage his

life

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it is really an asset as it enables them to perform well once they apply for any

job

Furthermore

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everybody has no aptitude in science or other subjects

such

as mathematics.So despite

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they pursue

this

job

oriented courses

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they cannot perform well at academic level or some of them even drop out due to undue pressure.The students’ interest on subject

also

a crucial factor in their achievement.These days

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parental pressure is

also

high due to rat race.Most of those children may not be able to meet their parents’ goals and eventually it can even lead to

sucide

the act of killing yourself

suicide

of pupils.

In addition

to that

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if every

graduates

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graduate

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pursue career oriented courses

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reduce

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reduces

the chances of jobs automatically.

Even it adds

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It even adds

burden

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a burden

on governments.So the unemployment rate increases and in

turn it

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turn, it

can be the reason for many anti social behaviour

such

as crime

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drug abuse

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alcoholism and so on. By way of conclusion, even though some claims

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I feel it is not a better option to stop teaching these soft subjects at tertiary level

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as the benefits outweigh the increased educational costs or less

job

availabilities.

Tue Jan 21 2020

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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects,like philosophy and history,and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment .To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are a important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate about whether people have the right to attend college so the governor should cover the tuition waiving. Meanwhile, from in my point of view, I do not consider myself an advocate of this idea.

I didn't have any nightmare travel experiences, but my friend has had such an experience.

In many countries nowadays,consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative?