some educationist arguer that non-exam arts-based subject, such as music, drama, art, and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve over all academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of
non-exam subject
Suggestion
the non - exam subject
has been debated by
educationer
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
educational
and students in recent years. It's argued that students must attend the non-exam subject like music instrument, PE, acting, hand craft in their secondary class, because of the academic performance can be
progross
gradual improvement or growth or development
progress
progressed
. In my perspective,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
totally agree with students should joining non-subject
curriculm
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
since it can
develp
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
develops
individual potential
talnet
natural abilities or qualities
talent
tent
tonight
as well as let them learn how to cooperate in the group.
First
all, everyone has unknown
potencial
existing in possibility
potential
and
tanet
moved around an axis or center
turned
on specific subjects, parents and
educationist
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
educations
should not only pay attention on
exam
Suggestion
the exam
but over-all
develpment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
.
Although
the students have
excellent transcript
Suggestion
an excellent transcript
on the exam is doesn't represent
stduents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
know what their
strghth
and weakness are.
On the other hand
, students who don't get
better score
Suggestion
a better score
better scores
on their test, it doesn't mean they are bad at studying.
For instance
, when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
in elementary school,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
was keen on PE class, and because of that,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
joined to school team and won the championship of the city. Clearly, if
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
had not took
Suggestion
didn't take
did not take
wasn't taking
haven't taken
have not taken
weren't taking
wasn't taken
PE class,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would not
known
Suggestion
know
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have
passion
Suggestion
a passion
on
Suggestion
for
excrise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
, even won the
comptition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitions
.
Furthermore
, it is
esstional
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
to learn to interact and
coperate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
with others.
especially
Suggestion
Especially
humainity
studies intended to provide general knowledge and intellectual skills (rather than occupational or professional skills)
humanities
humanity
emphysis
special importance or significance
emphasis
globalization nowadays, people need to know how to operate teamwork in order to achieve the goal. By doing
this
, students are not only can learn from each
others but
Accept comma addition
others, but
also
improve their
geneall
applying to all or most members of a category or group
general
gene all
final
performance as well as boost their self-
esstem
the condition of being honored (esteemed or respected or well regarded)
esteem
. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
mantain
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
mention
mentioned
that it is
essestion
give help or assistance; be of service
assisting
and compulsory to let students
to join
Suggestion
join
in their
scondary
being of second rank or importance or value; not direct or immediate
secondary
school, that's the fact that children have more
oppurnity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
to
discove
discover or determine the existence, presence, or fact of
discover
their passionate and
tanetlt
. What's more, while interact with others students and
coperation
a business firm whose articles of incorporation have been approved in some state
corporations
,
stusents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
know how to admire and work as a team. In the future,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
sicenrely
with sincerity; without pretense
sincerely
wish
govement
can encourage more students to join non-exam subject and
more activities provide
Suggestion
provide more activities
to students, so in the society, people will not only focus on how much score they get.
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