some educationist arguer that non-exam arts-based subject, such as music, drama, art, and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve over all academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of

non-exam subject

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the non - exam subject

has been debated by

educationer

the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill

education

educational

and students in recent years. It's argued that students must attend the non-exam subject like music instrument, PE, acting, hand craft in their secondary class, because of the academic performance can be

progross

gradual improvement or growth or development

progress

progressed

. In my perspective,

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totally agree with students should joining non-subject

curriculm

an integrated course of academic studies

curriculum

since it can

develp

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

develops

individual potential

talnet

natural abilities or qualities

talent

tent

tonight

as well as let them learn how to cooperate in the group.

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all, everyone has unknown

potencial

existing in possibility

potential

and

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moved around an axis or center

turned

on specific subjects, parents and

educationist

the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill

educations

should not only pay attention on

exam

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the exam

but over-all

develpment

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

developments

.

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the students have

excellent transcript

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an excellent transcript

on the exam is doesn't represent

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a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution

students

know what their

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and weakness are.

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, students who don't get

better score

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a better score

better scores

on their test, it doesn't mean they are bad at studying.

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, when

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in elementary school,

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was keen on PE class, and because of that,

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joined to school team and won the championship of the city. Clearly, if

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had not took

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didn't take

did not take

wasn't taking

haven't taken

have not taken

weren't taking

wasn't taken

PE class,

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would not

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know

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have

passion

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a passion

on

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for

excrise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

, even won the

comptition

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

competitions

.

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, it is

esstional

absolutely necessary; vitally necessary

essential

to learn to interact and

coperate

work together on a common enterprise of project

cooperate

with others.

especially

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Especially

humainity

studies intended to provide general knowledge and intellectual skills (rather than occupational or professional skills)

humanities

humanity

emphysis

special importance or significance

emphasis

globalization nowadays, people need to know how to operate teamwork in order to achieve the goal. By doing

this

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, students are not only can learn from each

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others, but

also

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improve their

geneall

applying to all or most members of a category or group

general

gene all

final

performance as well as boost their self-

esstem

the condition of being honored (esteemed or respected or well regarded)

esteem

. In conclusion

,

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,

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mantain

keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"

maintain

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mentioned

that it is

essestion

give help or assistance; be of service

assisting

and compulsory to let students

to join

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join

in their

scondary

being of second rank or importance or value; not direct or immediate

secondary

school, that's the fact that children have more

oppurnity

a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances

opportunity

to

discove

discover or determine the existence, presence, or fact of

discover

their passionate and

tanetlt

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. What's more, while interact with others students and

coperation

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corporations

,

stusents

a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution

students

know how to admire and work as a team. In the future,

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sicenrely

with sincerity; without pretense

sincerely

wish

govement

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can encourage more students to join non-exam subject and

more activities provide

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provide more activities

to students, so in the society, people will not only focus on how much score they get.