Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

The modern era of globalisation and
liberlization
the act of making less strict
liberalisation
liberalization
has made
major impact
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a major impact
on our lifestyles.It has changed than it used to be
few years
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a few years
back.The modern technology is taking place everywhere
for
instance in
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instance, in
Celluler industry
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the cellular industry
cellular industry
,
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,
in
Information Technology industry
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the Information Technology industry
and many more fields. People are spending more
time
in office and on when they are
in
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at
home
then
on social media like Facebook
,
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,
Whatsapp
,
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,
Instagram
etc
,
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,
but because of
this
they
are not giving
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are not given
time
to family and the family suffers
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. Childhood is the most crucial
time
in persons lifespan.It is like a foundation of your life, but unfortunately in todays world parents
dont
do not
don't
have
time
for
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.They are busy in their
officework
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office work
which is very hectic due to IT revolution.Both of the parents are working
nowadays so,
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nowadays, so
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
needs
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need
to go to daycare.There they spend their entire day with nannies and did not get the
time
from their parents.
Sometimes child
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Sometimes a child
thinks that he is not getting a support and security from parents and
hence
,
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,
not getting a
familytime
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family time
will
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
affecting
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affect
the psychological health of the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. To conclude
,
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,
children must get
time
from parents as it will lead very positively towards their personality development as well as the parent -child bond will get stronger.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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