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Inspite of advancement made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In
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 contemporary era, technological advancement has taken place in varied sectors including agriculture realm. Needless of
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 progression, many individuals are starving hungry all across the globe.
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 essay will explain the causes and plausible solutions for
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 issue. Undoubtedly, while, agriculture is growing day-by-day due to technology, still the
food
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 production is not in adequate
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of
 the inhabitants because of the ever growing
population
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 of the country. The
amount
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 of
food
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 produced does not satisfy the basic need of people. The
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 reason is increasing urbanization. Because of
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 development, the portion of land to grow crops has been
diminished which
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diminished, which
 eventually, lead to eradicate the
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 of
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production
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produced
. For
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 alarming issue, certain steps are required on war footing.
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,
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the government
 should take steps to control the over
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. They can conduct free campaigns to spread awareness amongst citizens, which can aid to control the growth in
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.
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,
authorities
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the authorities
 are ought to allocate some fruitful land to grow more crops rather constructing buildings. To exemplify, some country management has implemented that
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a certain amount
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 of land is to plant trees only. To conclude, over
population
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 and urbanization are the two main factors which engendered people facing trouble to get
food
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. It can be resolved with the proper management by the government, as
food
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 is a basic necessity for all living
being
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beings
.

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