Some people believe that woman should play an equal role as men in a country ‘s police force or military force, such as the army ,while other think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. What is your opinion?

Women participation in d
efence sector
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the defence sector
of a country is so valuable because in other all fields females are working like men with full z
eel
a feeling of strong eagerness (usually in favor of a person or cause)
zeal
sail
and confidence
as a result
, worth of f
emale
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females
the female
has increased in society. s
ome
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Some
people have n
otion
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the notion
a notion
that security forces
job
for l
adies
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the ladies
is not suitable while some have idea that it is best for them to join a
rmy
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the army
or military force. In my vision women should join d
efence sector
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the defence sector job
job
. F
emale
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The female
had been under observation as an inferior gender as compared to men.
This
thinking was present in our forefather’s t
ime
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time, however
however
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t is still present in paucity due to lack of education. Now in present times with the advancement in education with technology and changing of mind set regarding female rights with awareness
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here are participating in every profession. D
efence sector
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The defence sector job
job
is m
ost inspiring
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a most inspiring job
the most inspiring job
job
for a
female because ,
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a female, because
first
of all it is the most respectful profession in the world which means rights of women are the supreme priority in
this
field along with other facilities like salary
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ccommodation and protocol.
Furthermore
this
profession r
equire
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requires
emotions f
or
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in
the service of notion and
hence
ladies are already so emotional so they are better able to get s
acrifice
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sacrificed
for their country. As in many countries female are serving as captain and major in different arms. Another positive point for joining m
ilitary
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the military
is that the level of patience which is on extreme level in females than m
ale
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male, therefore
therefore
this
quality is most liked in police because they have to talk with people with patience. A lot of ladies t
hrough out
all the way through
throughout
the world are doing t
here
of them or themselves
their
jobs as traffic sergeant. No doubt
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hat female d
on’t have
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doesn’t have
physical stamina as much as men have but will definitely boost t
here
of them or themselves
their
stamina is ladies are selected in a
rmy
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the army
an army
and every lady solider will act as a torch of e
nlightment
education that results in understanding and the spread of knowledge
enlightenment
enlistment
of other ladies. I
n
Suggestion
In
a nutshell police or army are the most reliable departments for l
adies
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the ladies
because they gain honour
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ignity
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ecurity and show patience being the part of these departments no doubt
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they are a little bit f
or
to a considerable degree; very much
far
from physical fitness level as compared with men.
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