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The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future?

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The Universe is evolving drastically in terms of the task we do in our designation in the company. Different set of situations
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influences
 the
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 life and make people transform in the
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 everyone does daily. There are multiple reasons for
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evolution which
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evolution, which
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 essay.
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The Major reason
 for
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 change is predominantly technological. The Automation is changing the future style of
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.
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In fact
, it's influence is extremely bad that the impact may even lead to
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 loss. People started joining
different set
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a different set
 of courses which are available online and offline.
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, the application
Tableu
a set of data arranged in rows and columns
table
 which was used is now replaced by Microsoft Power BI. So, it's imperative that the
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 seeker or
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 holder has to be pro-active to learn and adapt as per the technology. Every Human has to join a course and enhance their skill set to make sure he can retain and
suceed
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
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in
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.
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, adaptability towards surviving in the competition will play a pivotal role in securing the
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. Even though the competition is huge, he shouldn't get
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 with it and try to find a way out.
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, if we lose a promotion by failing in the interview, he should take the feedback and
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 on it to improve his performance which can add value to his
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 life. Asking for the viewpoints of the interviewer is a must after the interview. To conclude, employees should be aware of the evolution of his
job
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 potential and make sure he take adequate precautions which will help achieve his desirable position. One should self motivate and always be attentive to the changes in technology.
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