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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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In recent years, urban citizens tend to live on their own or in small units rather than in extended family households. In my personal experience,
although
this
 trend probably has some drawbacks, it is mostly positive. On the one side, the negative effect of
this
 lifestyle is that it is possibly challenging for people to find someone to share problems and confide. It leads to over-using of TV,
Internet
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the Internet
causing
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is causing
causes
 serious damage to
individual’s mental health
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an individual’s mental health
. In the long period, people tend to have
feeling
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a feeling
the feeling
feelings
 of isolation from society which is the main reason of depression or even suicide.
This
 can be seen from
Japanese case
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a Japanese case
the Japanese case
 where more and more people in
this
 country choose to stay alone and separate from relatives that make Japan one of the highest suicide rate countries in the world. On the other side, the major merit of
this
 new living pattern is that it offers more personal time and space for individuals. Living independently allows people to have more freedom in planning events without being irritated by their senior relatives.
For example
, a lot college student these days
chooses
Suggestion
are choosing
 to live away from their family as they can do as they please after school without having to face constant judgments or criticism from their family.
Furthermore
, people in nuclear families often experience less conflict, which are more likely to happen in large family units. Living in small family units creates more opportunities for family members to interact and bond with each other. On the contrast, due to the fact that different people have dissimilar personalities and preferences, relatives who share the same roof could easily oppose each other and develop mutual hatred. In conclusion, despite of having some disadvantages,
this
 trend is generally a positive one not only because it offers more personal space and time for individuals but
also
 reduces conflicts between family members
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