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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
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Running a business and taking it to heights is no easy job. Of the several strategies required excellent marketing is one of them. Some people opine that marketing and
product
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 promotion is necessary for businesses to flourish. While I
can not
can not
cannot
 completely reject
this
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 point of
view but
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view, but
 I do believe that
product
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 quality, retail price and
brand
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 name
also
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 play a vital role in
this
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 regard.
To begin
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 with, marketing raises the awareness among people of the existing or new
product
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 a company has to offer. Without it no one would know
of
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about
 the
product
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, its features, services, price, and other aspects which sets it apart from its competitors. The effect will be seen in its plateau sales.
Thus
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 marketing techniques like advertisement on mass media devices like TV, social media, newspapers, magazines and radio is pivotal to reach out to people and sell your
product
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. Only
then
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 a consumer can evaluate and decide about buying it.
Moreover
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, effective marketing creates a good image in the customer's eyes and inclines them to buy. Showcasing the company's and
product
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's positive aspects draws the targeted audience to buy goods and services offered from them.
For instance
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, Nike advertised that their joggers are resistant to wear and tear and can
last
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 up to years.
This
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 influenced several customers into buying it.
However
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, marketing alone
can not
can not
cannot
 guarantee a successful business.
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Firstly
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Firstly, product
product
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 quality and the
maintenence
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
 of it is fundamental for a
product
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 to prosper. A poor
qualtiy
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
quality
product
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 even if marketed to the best of abilities
can not
can not
cannot
 survive long in todays
competive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
 market.
Secondaly
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Secondly
,
cost
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the cost
 of the
product
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also
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 plays a critical role. Potential buyers easily can surf online and compare prices offered by rival organizations and
mosltly
in large part; mainly or chiefly
mostly
in
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at
this
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 time of recession many people buy the cheapest
product
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 available.
Last
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 but not the least
brand
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 name compels many people into buying their
product
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. Many consumers buy services and items from well established and
reknowed
widely known and esteemed
renowned
brand
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 names as they are reliable and socially acceptable.
For example
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Iphone
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iPhone
IPhone
phone
 even though being much expensive from many of rival mobiles, still has the highest sales due to its famous and well reputed
brand
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 name. Coming to the
gest
the central meaning or theme of a speech or literary work
gist
best
 of the argument is, despite marketing being one of the critical techniques to yield higher sales yet other factors listed above
can not
can not
cannot
 be ignored in assuring running of a prosperous business.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visibility
  • Market recognition
  • Digital marketing
  • Social media
  • Search Engine Optimization (SEO)
  • Online advertising
  • Consumer behavior
  • Brand loyalty
  • Purchasing decisions
  • Brand identity
  • Ethical concerns
  • Financial burden
  • Innovation
  • Saturated market
  • Customer engagement
  • Traditional vs. modern marketing
  • Market trends
  • Feedback analysis
  • Adaptability
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