It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.
The today’s
Correct article usage
Today’s
family-life
changed a lot. Many Correct your spelling
family life
parents
are divorce
,Wrong verb form
divorced
a
lot of mothers and fathers have their Correct word choice
and a
job’s
far away from home. The children are often alone and Change noun form
jobs
lonley
... but what are the reasons for Correct your spelling
lonely
this
happening? First of all, I think that the
modern technology is one of the main Correct article usage
apply
reason
for Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
this
problem. Many parents
work
in their
nearest cities Change the word
the
from
their Change preposition
to
home
. They Fix the agreement mistake
homes
work
with computer
in big offices and Fix the agreement mistake
computers
came
home late at night. Wrong verb form
come
However
, they have no time
to look after their children. In the past, families used to work
"as a family". Every member worked hard and helped the family to survife
, Correct your spelling
survive
for
example
farmers. Add the comma(s)
example,
Furthermore
, the
education used to be Correct article usage
apply
controled
by Correct your spelling
controlled
the
Correct article usage
apply
parents
, not like today’s day-schools
with teachers and professors. Correct your spelling
day schools
On the other hand
, there must be a solution to bring separeted
families together. Correct your spelling
separated
At
my point of view, families should spend their free Change preposition
In
time
together. I am thinking about weekends or the time
after work
. Children need their parents
even when they are older. To give a reasonable example: I often go out with my parents
, mostly for a
dinner. Correct article usage
apply
Then
my brother and I speak about our future plans or something else. An intensiv
conversation is a possible solution. A similar way is, to divide your job into half-part Correct your spelling
intense
work
-times and spend your free time
leftover with your loved persons. A point against this
statement is to have financial problems. To sum up
I wish that every family is as close as possible with each other,
if they like that.Remove the comma
apply
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