It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.

The today’s
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family-life
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family life
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changed a lot. Many
parents
are
divorce
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divorced
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,
a
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and a
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lot of mothers and fathers have their
job’s
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jobs
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far away from home. The children are often alone and
lonley
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lonely
... but what are the reasons for
this
happening? First of all, I think that
the
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modern technology is one of the main
reason
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reasons
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for
this
problem. Many
parents
work
in
their
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the
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nearest cities
from
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to
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their
home
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homes
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. They
work
with
computer
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computers
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in big offices and
came
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come
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home late at night.
However
, they have no
time
to look after their children. In the past, families used to
work
"as a family". Every member worked hard and helped the family to
survife
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survive
,
for
example
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farmers.
Furthermore
,
the
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education used to be
controled
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controlled
by
the
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parents
, not like today’s
day-schools
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day schools
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with teachers and professors.
On the other hand
, there must be a solution to bring
separeted
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separated
families together.
At
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my point of view, families should spend their free
time
together. I am thinking about weekends or the
time
after
work
. Children need their
parents
even when they are older. To give a reasonable example: I often go out with my
parents
, mostly for
a
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dinner.
Then
my brother and I speak about our future plans or something else. An
intensiv
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intense
conversation is a possible solution. A similar way is, to divide your job into half-part
work
-times and spend your free
time
leftover with your loved persons. A point against
this
statement is to have financial problems.
To sum up
I wish that every family is as close as possible with each other
,
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if they like that.
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family interactions
  • technological advancements
  • virtual interactions
  • dual-income households
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • social structures
  • individualism
  • family cohesiveness
  • belonging
  • open communication
  • emotional support
  • shared activities
  • family dynamics
  • work-life balance
  • family traditions
  • regular gatherings
  • counseling
  • family therapy
  • prioritizing family time
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