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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

#crime #rate #offenders #parents #skills
During the
last
 decade, it has been an irrefutable fact that
crime rate
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the crime rate
 has been on
rise
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the rise
. Some people think that the only way to reduce the growing crime rate among
youth
 is by encouraging parents for finer upbringing. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing how I disagree by stating other factors that has contributed to the increase in crime rate by youngsters.
Although
, parenting plays a vital role in bringing up children. But
reasons
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the reasons
 like schooling and peers
also
 impact the nurturing of children during early stages and teens.
For instance
, the type of school, rules and regulations, awareness programmes to guide good and bad, teachers and the environment helps in development socially, mentally, emotionally and physically as they spend half of the day at school. It has been observed that the percentage of youngsters who have been to a good school and
channelized
transmit or serve as the medium for transmission
channeled
 their energies
in
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on
 achieving their goals have never been into any crimes.
Furthermore
, schools enable students to utilise their talent and energies in attaining to pursue productive work.
Moreover
, peers
also
 have an impact on the
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
 of
youth
 as they spend
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of their quality time with them. Peer pressure is one among the other reasons which
also
 effects
youth
 to get
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 different habits like smoking, smugglings, taking drugs, stealing and other unethical activities.
For example
, one of my
friend
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friends
 started smoking because his friends smoke as it is a sign of masculinity.
Furthermore
, I completely agree that it is important to have a good friend circle to reduce illegal activities. Now a
days
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day
, criminal activities have been more committed by
youth
 leading to juvenile trials which needs to be controlled not only by influencing parents regarding ways of good parenting skills but
also
 by considering other causes. I strongly disagree that by changing the nurturing style we can overcome
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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