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Some people think that life is better in cities, however others claim that village life is far better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the biggest debate humans have is whether city
life
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 is better than village
life
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 or vice versa.
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, I believe that rural
life
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 is far better than urban
life
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.
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 will indulge in both views. To commence, with the multifarious reasons why some people think that
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 in towns is better. The predominant one is that availability of all facilities,
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 as hospitals for health treatments, college and universities for good education, shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 for shopping needs
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. Whereas, people living in rural areas have to go in cities to get
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 amenities.
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, people believe that
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 is full of provisions in cities.
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 of
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 is cultural diversity. Some of
the large
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the larger
the largest
 cities attract people to come and live from different backgrounds. We can meet them and can know about their culture activities and lifestyle. Moving
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, with the advantages of living in rural areas.
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 and foremost is that it is a
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 free place to live.
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 is free from all
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types
 of pollutions,
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 air
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, noise
pollution
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, water
pollution
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. Villagers breath
in
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of
 fresh air that makes them strong and healthy. While in
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cities, pollution
city pollution
city city pollution
city's pollution
pollution
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 is on high
level which
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level, which
 cause
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of
 many diseases. Apart from
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, is fresh and organic food. It is true that people have
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a wide area
 to grow their own food,
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 rice, vegetables, fruits, milk
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, which is Free from mixture and chemicals and healthy for them. In conclusion, to agglomerating the above-mentioned viewpoints, it can be said that masses hold distinct perceptions. As both the motions are relevant to some extent.
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