Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

In these modern times

progress

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of a country above all is measured in term of its GDP and its Defence capabilities. A higher GDP translates to a strong

economy

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, which in turn corresponds to a higher standard of living for its populace.

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my opinion prioritizing economic

advancement

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by a nation’s

government

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is a justifiable endeavour to a certain extent. In a capitalist society financial gain is the prime motive of any activity. Figuratively in our society the prospect financial gain is the fuel the drives every activity.

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is only possible in a strong and healthy

economy

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. A strong and progressing

economy

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is vital to a nation’s

progress

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. A promising

economy

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attracts various foreign direct investments and various other types of economic interests that help a country to sustain and develop itself. Economic

progress

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can

also

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be translated as the ability of a country to provide various benefits to its populace and it is

also

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a proof of its

productivity

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production

and use of its resources. A strong

economy

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also

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a very effective tool for a nation’s international diplomacy. In recent

years it

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years, it

has been observed the lapse in economic

progress

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can have a detrimental effect on the nation’s

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was evident in 2008’s financial crisis and the following recession that was declared the financial disaster of the decade.

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behooves

be appropriate or necessary

behoves

a nation’s

government

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to think about its economic

progress

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. On the other side economic

progress

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devoid of

progress

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in cultural, scientific and numerous other fronts

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are

hollow in its nature. It governments duty to preserve and uplift various regional cultures and its ancestral occupations. Sacrificing local handicraft for economic gain is not justifiable. Lacking governments support

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art and cultural heritage will be extinct in a matter of years.

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Moreover

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Moreover, government

government

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must

also

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encourage scientific

progress

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in the nation. Scientific

advancement

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plays a vital role in

nation’s

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the nation’s progress

progress

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Advancement

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in science has the potential to propel a regional power to a superpower station on an international forum.

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, it is evident that

although

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nation’s

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the nation’s government

government

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must prioritize its economic

progress

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, it must

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give due attention other aspect of its national

progress

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. In my opinion economic

progress

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fuels the advance various other fields.

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Moreover

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Moreover, progress

progress

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in numerous other fields makes a nation a haven for investors

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boosting the

economy

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making it a cyclic process where

advancement

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of one field fuels the

advancement

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of the other.

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Jan 23, 2020

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