Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

There is an opinion that work plays the most important role in people's
life
and
life
becomes unworthy without achieving the success of
career
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the career
. I partly agree with
this
viewpoint. Because goals of
life
make
people
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People
much happy as well as
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
factors like family
is
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are
more essential. One of the main
factor
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factors
of being satisfied in
life
is job satisfaction and having high position
.
Accept space
.
Human beings are born to develop and searching something new. If
person
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a person
the person
has an aim he will do his best to reach it which leads him to have success, prosperities in working place. Having made
career he
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career, he
provides his
life
financially guarantee and can get
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
of his
life
doing what he desires.
Thus it
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Thus, it
is clear why having
promotion
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a promotion
in
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at
work is beneficial. On
another hand having
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the other hand, having
the other hand having
other hand having
happy family is main factor making
life
worthy. Many people run after the career and forget about their personal
life
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life, consequently
consequently
they end up their
life
unhappy and miserable.For some people private
life
is more important they prefer to be surrounded by lovely members, enjoy their
life
and accept it without material values.
For instance
super model Natalya Vodyanova has given up the model industry because of her family. Now she is
happy wife
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a happy wife
and mother of three children.
Therefore to
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Therefore, to
be with close people is the main meaning of our
life
To conclude, having
wellpaid
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well paid
job and promotion is more worthwhile for some individuals. People should find balance between work and private
life both of them
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life, both of them
connected with each other.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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