Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people overuse private vehicles which leads to traffic jam and ecological problems and there is an opinion that private cars have to be forbidden to enter the city centre.I partly agree with
this
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
as
this
will be beneficial for
environment
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the environment
as well as discomfort for commuters. In
modern life people
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modern life, people
rely on cars too much and the amount of vehicles is increasing day by
day which
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day, which
leads to traffic jam and pollutes the environment. As a
reasult
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
result
population
have
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has
problems with health and becomes impossible to travel or to
ger
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
get
to their destination.
That is
why government should control the transport system and make drivers pay money to go
in to
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into
city centre
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the city centre
. If
this
system is included
into
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in
the law
,
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,
people will use more public transport
,
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,
ride bicycles or walk a lot.
Moreover
, it will be more beneficial for the environment, the amount of CO2
,
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,
which cars
pomp
a mechanical device that moves fluid or gas by pressure or suction
pump
out
,
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,
will
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Will
be reduced
also
air pollution.
Thus it
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Thus, it
is clear why drivers should be purchased
.
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.
On the other hand
,
this
method will infringe people's rights. Drivers will always be under depression of having thoughts not
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
fined.
Furthermore
,
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,
this
method will bring issues for
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
who commute every.
For example
, a lot of people who work in metropolis they live in
suburbs
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the suburbs
and travel long distance every day using public transport is uncomfortable or even stressful for them especially in winter. In conclusion, intensive traffic has made big cities uncomfortable to live and to employ,
therefore
drivers should purchase in order to get
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
the city centre.
This
way does not seem effective to solve
such
problem another solution should be undertaken.
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