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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

#countries #children #people #government #responsibility
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Most of the countries in
this
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 world are turning into menace as far as caring towards kids and hygiene is concerned. Kids tend towards eating ready made items with lots of add-ons which are not good for health. It's big time that government should take initiative towards reducing that happening. In
this
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 essay we will discuss about how harmful eating habits can be, which cause bad health and make kids fat. The Sales for burgers and pizzas has hit
record high level
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record high levels
a record high level
 in the recent past which are in fact has high cholesterol content. These eatable items are very appealing
hence
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 children tends to eat more and their BMI is hitting alarming levels.
For example
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, Burgers food chain of restaurants
such
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 as Mc Donald's and pizza joints like Domino's they use lots of cheese content. It's agreed to the fact that these food chains cause
lot
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lots
 of trouble for the growing children in terms of big belly. Parents should take adequate measures when they allow kids to go outside to eat lunch or dinner. They need to make sure and keep an eye on them as to where they are heading to have their meal. It's better to guide their sons and daughters to eat in a place which maintains good hygiene. To Conclude we all need to agree to the fact that the World is evolving and we need to maintain our body with good yoga and exercise every day and eat hygienic food to stay healthy and
avoiid
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
 gaining weight.
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