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of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations. preceding all others in time or space or degree
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For example
, South and North Korea have football games Linking Words
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two
nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a Use synonyms
hundreds
of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports, Suggestion
hundred
two
divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.
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On the other hand
, some sports matches can make international relations worse. Linking Words
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, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in Linking Words
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overflow
. Sometimes, after the matches, the Suggestion
over flow
two
rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly.
In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be Use synonyms
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the good
ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely. Suggestion
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However
, I believe that games Linking Words
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be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.In today’s modernized can not
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era nobody
has sufficient time to write letters to their loved ones. Accept comma addition
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Moreover, it
also
takes longer to send or receive any information. But the Internet is the easiest way to send messages to our loved ones. Communication can be either in the form of e-mail or through text messages sent via internet to mobile phones. We can send and receive messages straight way.
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hand, today’s
mostly prefers
to do chatting through the Internet. During Suggestion
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very popular day
-by-day.
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sides of Use synonyms
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coin, which usually runs parallel. So like other Use synonyms
things internet
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things, internet
also
have some downsides, like causing people health Linking Words
problems
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problems, for
for example
, poor Linking Words
eye-sight
, back ache or migraines. Today’s teenagers usually prefer to spend their time on the internet rather than to participating in other physical activities, which causing them to have a weaker physical health.
To conclude, I would like to say that the Internet is normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
one
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most relevant
information regarding every field in a very short period of time.
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is a great essay, well done! Remember, ‘the Internet’ is a proper noun, currently, there is only Linking Words
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. Pay attention to your punctuation – many commas are missing after linking words. Use synonyms
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, the essay is well argued and set out.Linking Words