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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of money spent by the authority between 2010 and 2015 in nine categories. Overall, at the beginning of the
period
 education was the most significant expenditure, while other sectors were the least. In comparison, at the end of the
period
 education was still the costliest segment and the lowest sectors were
transport
Suggestion
transported
, culture and leisure and the other sectors. Education sector accounted for 24% in 2010 but it was slightly decreased to %21 in 2015. Healthcare
also
 decreased gradually, from 21% to 20%. Defence was 17% in 2010 but it fell to 14% in 2015. Transport decreased 2% and culture and lecture decreased 1%. Pensions and others remained steady for both years. Interest on borrowing was 5% in 2010 and it grew twice in 2015. At the beginning of the
period
 welfare was 8%,
however
, it increased 5% and it became 13% at the end of the
period
.
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