The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Changes in the construction structure of Queen Marry hospital over a period of 40 years since its construction in 1960 are shown in the maps below. The hospital’s development is captured into three different stages, namely; 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, it is conspicuously apparent that the hospital has increased in size.
Additionally
, a new cancer
centre
and a nursing
school
have been built and extended, resulting in a significant downsizing – almost 50%- in the capacity of the
car
park
. In 1960, the hospital was constructed near
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the main road and
next
to a shopping
centre
. The large area behind the hospital was occupied by a
car
park
and the land behind the shopping
centre
was
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farmland. By 1980, two new hospital buildings, namely; a pharmacy and a cancer
centre
were built after the shopping
centre
was demolished to make a room for the new facilities.
Furthermore
, the hospital obtained the farmland and turned it into a nursing
school
. In 2000, the cancer
centre
was extended to cover the whole area of the nursing
school
.
As a result
, the
car
park
was divided into two parts so that it provided a smaller
car
park
and a small nursing
school
. The main hospital building remained unchanged.
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  • infrastructural evolution
  • healthcare facilities
  • technological advancements
  • capacity expansion
  • modernization efforts
  • historical layout
  • landscape adaptation
  • access routes
  • renovation and improvement
  • initial structure
  • environmental considerations
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