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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead going to an office every day. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages this situation?

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How old are you? Did you experience that modern
technology
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 before generation? If we can’t use c
omputer
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computers
the computer
and i
nternet,
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the internet
 how will you do? Can you imagine that situation? Maybe we will have trouble that delay working and difficult solving some trouble in c
ompany.
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the company
a company
 T
oday modern
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Today, modern
technology
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 is going to become necessary equipment in our life.
This
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technology
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 is the best equipment. It i
s bring
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has brought
is brought
brings
some advantages, specially saving the
time
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. You know why
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 is b
ig benefit.
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a big benefit
 That means, “You can easily make result.”. If you don’t have c
omputer,
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a computer
computers
 you have to draw any module form for your report. You need t
o
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for
enough
time
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, focusing on paper for accuracy line and waiting reply to your client. The other is keeping a document
that is
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 m
ore clearly
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clearer
more clear
and safety. In the past, usually people used paper for their recording. b
ut,
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But
 as long as they were not saving the report to u
sed
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use
special
technology
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. They couldn’t keep on their documents for a long
time
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.
However
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, modern
technology
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 helps us to protect important information.
Although
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that is
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 a good development,
this
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 is
also
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 having disadvantages. Specially, communicate with precious people. We can easily see someone using c
ell-phone
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a cellphone
cellphone
anywhere. Even if they are eating with someone. How many
t
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ime
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times
d
id you speaking
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did you speak
were you speaking
have you spoken
were you spoken
did you speaking
a day? Can you count how many statement you s
peaking
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speak
are speaking
a day? y
ou
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You
don’t talk anymore when you order some food in restaurants. Employees of s
hop
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shoppers
rate
also
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 decrease.
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 another reason.
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 of people, e
mployer
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an employer
the employer
chooses new
technology
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. I think a
ll of things have
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all things have
two sides, if we will use wrong and over, that
also
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 bring any negative result. So we need control about it.

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