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The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000.

The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000.
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Two pie charts depict information regarding the production of cotton in five
countries
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 in the given years
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1990 and 2000. TANAM In 1990, India was the country which was leading in cotton fabrication, which was just under
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half (45%). Another two
countries
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, Australia and Canada were contributing
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 equal proportion in thread cultivation with a total
40
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%,
while
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 the least
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 (15%) of produce were devoted by Russia. After a decade, it is observed that three
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 namely India, Australia and Russia experienced a drop in wool making. Though India felt a decline, it was again the leading contributor with 33%.
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 a significant change was noticed in Russia in which the production growth was nearly half of the year 1990.
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, Canada was only the country which jumped in harvesting linen from 20% to 30% in a given period. Another unique feature of the
second
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 graph is that nearly one-sixth of the manufacture was attributed
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 China (15%) which was as equal
as
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 Australia (15%)
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 it had not contributed
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 cultivating jute in
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 former decade.
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, generally in both decades, the contribution of all
countries
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 was in similar order except China.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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