In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the recent years, the number of elderly people, who are admitted into the
care
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homes has increased
singnificantly
in a statistically significant way
significantly
. While some people
thinks
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think
that it is the
families
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family's
responsbility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
to cover the cost, I believe that the
government
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should cover the costs of taking
care
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of the senior citizens. Turning
firstly
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to the main reason for my opinion, old men and women have served their country over their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
legs
,
moreover
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they paid their taxes over the years.
Hence
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, they deserve to be taken
take
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taken
care
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of, since part of the taxes they paid is
suppose
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supposed
to cover health and social
care
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expenses. A recent study conducted by Bath University found that if the
authorites
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
paid the full costs of
care
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homes,
then
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the
government
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budget should increase by 0.1% only.
Such
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a
negligable
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hike in budget should not stop the
law makers
a maker of laws; someone who gives a code of laws
lawmakers
from paying the money needed to run those
care
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centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. Moving on to the
second
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reason, with the high expenses for old people
care
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centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, it is expected that families would not be able to afford the costs,
thus
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depriving the elderly from the social
care
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they require.
For instance
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, a friend of mine has his mother in London
care
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
. The
center
Suggestion
Center
charges an amount of 1000 pounds per month, which is beyond my friend’s
finicial
exacting especially about details
finical
abilites
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
abilities
,
thus
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he was forced to take his mother out of the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, and look after her at home.
This
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situation resulted in immense
difficultes
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulties
for both of them. In
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, due to the fact
that most of families
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that most families
would not be able to pay for
care
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centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, and
government
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moral obligations, my view is the
government
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should cover the cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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