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In some countries, there are many social problems involving teenagers. Some people say this is because parents spend much of their time at work and not at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s modern society, young people are involved in a variety of negative issues, around the world. It is argued that the main reason behind
this
 fact is that most of the parents do not allot enough
time
 to their children due to their heavy work routine. I completely agree with
this
 idea that
this
 problem
steams
grow out of, have roots in, originate in
stems
 mainly from a lack of attention of parents for their children.
Firstly
, teenagers are not nurtured well when the parents spend less
time
 with them. Having a hectic schedule in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
 makes them unable to allocate the required
time
 for their children, which leads to undesirable consequences,
such
 as juvenile crime, alcoholism etc. Owing to not feeling the affection of parents, children can easily show propensity for delinquent activities. Another point
woth
a unit of language that native speakers can identify
word
what
 to consider is that, teenagers are vulnerable to the influence of their peers and they are affected by both what they see and hear from their negative peers. When parents do not monitor children’s actions they try to have an inclination towards nefarious actions. Neglecting children
enables
Suggestion
enable
 them to opt negative vices. Needless to say, it results in an escalation of crimes conducted by teenagers. In conclusion, I do believe that in order for a child to grow up in a balanced way parents need to allocate much of their
time
 to the upbringing period of their children.
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