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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
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Every man has own skill. These individual skills make them different to others. When a
company
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 appointed new staff, they should focus on workman's skill than academic results and
experience
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. In my point of view, I agree with
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 topic.
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, qualification is
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 important. On one hand, Most of the companies are giving attention to the
candidate
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's qualifications and
experience
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. They do not concern about
employee
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's
quality
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. Qualification is very important for every person. When a recruit an
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 for a particular post, they should look after the qualification. For higher posts, they should look at the
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's
experience
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.
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, A IT
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 who is looking for engineers, but a people who are qualified in the different subject he cannot work as an engineer cause he has no idea about engineering subject.
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 is one of the main reasons. That's why companies are looking for qualifications. Another example is if a
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 needs a worker for the higher post they should look after the
candidate
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's
experience
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. Cause, if they appoint inexperienced staff, the staff cannot run properly.
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, the employer needs to pay more attention to their
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's skills. Educational qualification cannot be the main. If a
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 has
quality
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, he/she deserve the
job
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. Freshers, those who have no
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 but have some
quality
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 they should deserve the
job
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. The instance that, my friend Abir. He has recently completed his graduation, but his result is very poor. He has some extraordinary
quality
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. He gets a
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 in a
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. In conclusion, If an
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 has more
quality
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, he/she should chance to recruit by a
company
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. In my opinion, Every
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 needs to pay attention to freshers and they should deserve a
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 if they have superior
quality
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.

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