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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am unpleasant with the computer. I bought from your shop. The problem started about two weeks ago. Some colours in the screen faded which made it very difficult to see the images clearly. Let me explain my situation, I am a house designer most of my work involves suing the computer and editing some little details to rooms. But with less colours on the screen, it is nearly impossible for me to get any job done.

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, two of my long-term clients have been complaining that my designs are not as good as they used to be. Would you kindly replace my device with a new one? I would prefer it to be within

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week, since I have urgent work to do. I do not mind if I have to pay extra delivery fees. Thank you for your consideration Yours Faithfully HESHAM

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

154 words

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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Fully explain your ideas

As the result of tourisms and the incresing number of people traveling, there's an growingh demand for more flights. What problems does it have on the enviroment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

Some people think that computer games can be detrimental for children's health. Others think that they can be great for education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some children spent hours everyday on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance,such as food and health. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

These days many families move abrod for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Other believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your opinion.