The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Every field has its importance

similarly

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arts, music and theatre has its own importance.

For

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instance if

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instance, if

I talk

about music it's

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about music, it's

an integral part of

industry most

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industry, most

of our countries are known by the artists and their Music

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This

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is something which is linked to

everyones

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everyone's

everyone

soul.

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A Song, it's lyrics may relate to feelings of so many people

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It represents many of us

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In the same way if I talk about theatres our country's history is so much famous for its theatre

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The concept of

film industry

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the film industry

was

first

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introduced in Pakistan. Today theatres

represents

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represent

an image of

country

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a country

the country

just like Indian movies represent Muslims as terrorist and so many people think same about Muslims

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Because

such

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things have a very strong impact on people

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Finally

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the conclusion is

arts music

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arts, music

is an integral part of every country

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It represents

culture

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the culture

a culture

of many countries

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And is very much linked with

people

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peoples

feelings

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Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural heritage
public services
economic benefits
mental health
well-being
equitable access
creativity
innovation
prioritize
essential services
healthcare
education
tourism
global recognition
holistic development
mutually exclusive
philanthropy
subsidize
infrastructure
socio-economic status
altruistic
civic engagement
aesthetics
civic pride
utilitarian

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The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The government should spend money in promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring for professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's fast paced world, many individuals struggle with delaying or positioning tasks Dicuss causes of this and suggest an effective solution to overcome it

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoid change. Others however think that change is always good discussion both views and give your opinion.

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