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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for the teacher in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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From fifty years ago that
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 computers were built, till about twenty years ago that they entered our homes;
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 technology indisputably changed our lives. Nowadays, we are impressed by duty of computers in
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the bank's system
, transportation system and especially in the educational system. We find them as a non-problematic help of our teachers,
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 there is the fear of removing
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's role. Through the upcoming literature, I try to proof that nothing can replace teachers in schools. Before considering the fact that computers may replace couches, it is essential to remember that what exactly a computer is. We are talking about a humankind invention that makes progress each day
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 his/her brain's abilities. I doubt if it can surpass it's creator and replaces human intelligence.
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, computers make a virtual world;
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 atmosphere of a class with a
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 is a real
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. We have a face-to-face situation in which, we feel more like studying. As psychologists mention, gesture plays an important role in communication. It could be said that a similar thing can be applied to education, when we see our
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, his/her body language and especially way of teaching.
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, I believe that nothing can replace an experienced tutor,
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 who spends many years teaching. A good
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 always knows his/her apprentice in
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 only and know about their problems. Experience and emotion are two parameters that make an instructor a professional
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 that a computer does not have. In conclusion, I want to mention that most educational systems and teachers utilize computers as an aid. There is no fear of their increase role in our lives, because their virtual world and limited capabilities in comparison with a
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 have noticeable disadvantages.

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