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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Wildlife
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 is one of a noteworthy case to constantly keep the environmental balance. Reduction of
wildlife
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population
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 can interfere the natural ecosystem and food chain system,
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 affecting the survival of other living things. Mostly, the decrease of animal
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 caused by human actions.
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, there are some solutions to overcome that matter. Some of them is it can be avoided by preserving the environment and protecting the life of wild animals. The
wildlife
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population
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 decline can be prevented by not doing illegal hunting. It often occurs and done by irresponsible people who hunted animals in prohibiting way for their own benefit. The hunt must have a legally valid license and is from the government. An official permit will avert the occurrence of massive hunting. Generally, the government does not allow the ledge animals to be hunted, only animals that have large populations can be hunted.
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, protect the ledge animals by making conservation or
wildlife
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 reserve
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 can help preventing the
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population
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 decline. The government makes conservation or
wildlife
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 reserve to provide a safe habitat for animals so that they are able to stay alive and multiply to increase their populations.
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, it can keep the environmental balance, as a place for support cultivation, and a place for learning to explore knowledge and research. In conclusion, the existing of
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 depends on the human actions. If human can take care of the animal and the environment well, which is one of natural unit, the animal survival will
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 be maintained.

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