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Subject: some people believe it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

#people #information #research #business #world
Nowadays some individuals hold the point of view that people should be acknowledged by plenty of
information
 about different branches,
such
 as
business
Suggestion
a business
 or scientific research,
however
, others believe
this
 act will be unnecessary. Both views will be
discussed follow
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discussed, followed
discussed followed
 by my own opinion as well. People should be informed by the recent
information
 in different sections of
country
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the country
. Everything should be clarified,
for instance
 the progresses in medical technology or even in
industry
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the industry
. All of them will be done in order to be updated with the ongoing situation of the country. These data are spread through the news or even social media.
In contrast
, others think
this
 valuable
information
 should not be shared because of convenient reasons. One of them is that these detailed data are not useful for ordinary people to understand. If the press or media discuss some issues
such
 as nuclear technology and its scientific procedure of enriching it, that would be difficult for all of us to comprehend.
Besides
, some of these data should not be announced openly because of security matters. They are so vital that must be kept officially. To sum up, in spite of the complexity of scientific
information
, my view is that people should be informed by them somehow in order to be updated about the evolving events and
situation
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the situation
 of the country and it is totally justified.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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