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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #jobs #individuals #society
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University
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education
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 is
undoubtly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
 a
tremendus
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
tremendous
 help
for
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in
 building a good
career but
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career, but
 it can
also
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 can be a great resource for developing human
assetes
anything of material value or usefulness that is owned by a person or company
assets
for
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of
 the
society
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 and it
also
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 creates an
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
 for an individual to develop good moral values. The
job
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 market in todays
world
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 is very
compitive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
. To survive in
this
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 modern
world
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 an individual will need specialized
skilles
an ability that has been acquired by training
skills
.
University
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education
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 provides that
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
do learn
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does learn
 those skills.
Companis
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Companies
Company
 that provide
job
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 are always looking for people with great talent who can give something back to the company and
university
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education
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 helps those
job
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 providers to pick the perfect candidate who can be an asset for the company in the future. Though a degree from
an
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a
university
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 is a great help to get a good
job
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 it is not the only benefit of
university
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education
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. As the name"
university
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" suggest
an
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a
university
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 is a representative of the whole
world
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. There a student get to learn about many things that a book or class cannot teach him/her. He
get
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gets
 to meet people from all over the
world
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 or at least all over the country. He experiences different culture which can
broden
make broader
broaden
burden
 the
horizen
the line at which the sky and Earth appear to meet
horizon
horizons
 of his mind. An open minded person can be a great asset for the
society
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.
Education
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 in
an
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a
university
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also
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 helps the individual at a personal level. It helps the
stududents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
 to be independent.
it
Suggestion
It
 helps them to learn how the real
world
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 work, how to behave with others, how to deal with
difficult situation
Suggestion
difficult situations
a difficult situation
 on their own. At the
end I
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end, I
 would like to say that
university
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education
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 is obviously very important for getting a good
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job but
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job, but
 it
also
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 helps the individuals to grow
imotionaly
in an emotional manner
emotionally
 and provides the
society
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 with
individual
Suggestion
individuals
 who can give something back to the
society
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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