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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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At any point of time
one
 can be facing a good or a bad phase of
life
. Our
life
 runs on these two aspects consecutively or simultaneously. Some people have the opinion of accepting
such
 situations in
life
 and keep
living
the act of departing
leaving
 it the way it is going on.
For example
, if
one
person
 is living in an unhappy relationship with someone he should accept the other
person
 as it is and continue living his
life
 with the same
person
. On the other side, some people argue that we should not accept the bad situations in our
life
 rather we should work on turning the bad phase into a good
one
 and should try improving it with our maximum efforts. In my opinion, a
person
 can live his
life
 to the fullest only when he keeps passing all the hurdles and obstacles with solutions and alternatives to them. Accepting the bad scenarios as it is will only make
one
person
 weak for all future incidents that he might have to cope up with.
As a result
one
 might become depressed enough to leave all hopes of
living the
Suggestion
living the full life
life
 full of happiness. In the conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will only say that improving the bad phase of
life
 will not only make
onself
reflexive form of "one"
oneself
stronger but
Accept comma addition
stronger, but
also
 a
person
 with a positive attitude towards
life
 and others.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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