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young people spend their free time in shopping malls. This has a negative effect on young people and society. To what extent do you agree?

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According to young peoples has
much
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many
 duties without spend
there
of them or themselves
their
time
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 in shopping malls
,
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,
but today many peoples work in shopping malls for salary to afford their family and
also
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childrens
a young person of either sex
children
,
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,
so in these
cases they
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cases, they
 meet with many unknown peoples like some are bad and some are good peoples if we talk about bad peoples so it's 100 percent sure they will invite these people for bad effects and if we talk about good peoples so they will be
have
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having
 a secure life. As i can see many people stay at home and they spare their
time
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 on studies,chatting with friends,chelling with friends,and play a games with there family members so it's
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 causing to the negative effects like our body weight and much more,so we should spend our
time
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 with much activities that our society
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 know about us that look it to these peoples that they are very intelligent and good excellence, So the base on the chart peoples are spare their
time
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 in shopping malls so it is mean they waisting their
time
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 and it is a very bad for these peoples they can waist that
time
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 in more works like outside sport and much more it will be so well for peoples if they will be waist that
time
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 in shopping malls and buy much things without no need so it is
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 a big negative effect for peoples and society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumerism
  • advertising
  • local businesses
  • neighborhood communities
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • obesity
  • socialize
  • amenities
  • economic growth
  • cultural homogenization
  • ecological footprint
  • entertainment
  • trends
  • brand loyalty
  • spending habits
  • mall culture
  • local shops
  • health implications
  • job opportunities
  • tourism
  • consumer debt
  • environmental impact
  • energy consumption
  • waste generation
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