young people spend their free time in shopping malls. This has a negative effect on young people and society. To what extent do you agree?

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According to young peoples has

much

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many

duties without spend

there

of them or themselves

their

time

in shopping malls

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but today many peoples work in shopping malls for salary to afford their family and

also

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

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so in these

cases they

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cases, they

meet with many unknown peoples like some are bad and some are good peoples if we talk about bad peoples so it's 100 percent sure they will invite these people for bad effects and if we talk about good peoples so they will be

have

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having

a secure life. As i can see many people stay at home and they spare their

time

on studies,chatting with friends,chelling with friends,and play a games with there family members so it's

also

causing to the negative effects like our body weight and much more,so we should spend our

time

with much activities that our society

also

know about us that look it to these peoples that they are very intelligent and good excellence, So the base on the chart peoples are spare their

time

in shopping malls so it is mean they waisting their

time

and it is a very bad for these peoples they can waist that

time

in more works like outside sport and much more it will be so well for peoples if they will be waist that

time

in shopping malls and buy much things without no need so it is

also

a big negative effect for peoples and society.

Sat Jan 25 2020

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retail outlets
consumerism
advertising
local businesses
neighborhood communities
sedentary lifestyle
obesity
socialize
amenities
economic growth
cultural homogenization
ecological footprint
entertainment
trends
brand loyalty
spending habits
mall culture
local shops
health implications
job opportunities
tourism
consumer debt
environmental impact
energy consumption
waste generation

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young people spend their free time in shopping malls. This has a negative effect on young people and society. To what extent do you agree?

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