You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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Dear Mr Scheer, I am writing

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letter to express my deep disappointment with the news that the

work

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placement

programme

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has been cancelled

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summer. One of the main reasons I chose to study Business

English

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at your school in July and August was the chance to participate in the

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placement

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. There are many

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schools in California that offer Business

English

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, but not many

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offer the chance to go and

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in a local company as part of the

course

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programme

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. Your school is more expensive than the competition, but I was happy to pay extra because I thought the

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programme

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was better quality. Now

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however

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, I am very unhappy because I have spent a lot of money and I am not getting the

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I want. As the

course

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programme

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is now very different to the one advertised, I would like to request a full refund of the money I have paid for

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course

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. I will try to contact other schools in California, or maybe New York, which run Business

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courses and can guarantee a

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placement as part of the

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. I look forward to receiving your reply. Yours Sincerely, James

charles

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

202 words

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