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Smacking childern is the best form of discipline To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#childern #form #discipline
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I will never agree with
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 beating children is the best way to
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a branch of knowledge
discipline
 them Why will a
parents
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parent
 try to beat a child when he/she does not follow her
advice hitting
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advice, hitting
 children when offending make the child more dangerous in the family. They are many ways
to
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for
 parents can control their
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species, each
 time that make you angry like not talking to them or not giving them their relevant needs at the right time for you to do that for them they will know they have to change their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
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 rather than you torturing or harming them. Children of nowadays don't need to be harmed if they do anything wrong. They parent should try
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to talk
 or lecture them on what they will change. Smacking a kid everyday when he did something wrong that will not stop him from doing what you ask him to do in his mind each Time he did anything bad the will say there is nothing his parents will do than to beat which is not suppose to be
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 will make the kid more dangerous to the family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • smacking
  • punishment
  • behavior
  • childhood
  • communication
  • rebellion
  • consequences
  • alternatives
  • psychological impact
  • constructive
  • authoritarian
  • neglectful
  • abusive
  • controversial
  • divisive
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