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IT IS GENERALLY AGREED THAT SOCIETY BENEFITS FROM WORK OF ITS MEMBERS COMPARE THE CONTRIBUTION OF ARTIST TO SOCIETY WITH CONTRIBUTION OF SCIENTISTS TO SOCIETY

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the millennium
he society is polarized into two groups almost equally. Regrading notion that contributions of artist and scientist to society. Different people have their distinct mindset. The following paragraphs should shed light on both approaches before making a final judgement. To commence with
first
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
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 and foremost, artist enhances th
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ualities and make a creative ar
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art
f life.
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, increasing ab
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the ability
f thinking in various forms
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 as sculpture,p
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Accept space
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nce and so on.
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, ar
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the arts
nspire our emotions gives us relaxation. To cite an example, arts of different forms increase awareness of social crimes
such
 as a poverty issues and child la
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someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
On the other hand
 science is a truth of every form of nature. It has lead to gr
eatest d
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great
greater
iscoveries and
also
 inventions for solution of existing problems.
As a result
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of
etter living hood and fruitful life. Overall,. Society considered both approaches by th
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, scientific research ar
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ore valuable.

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