In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many developed countries like Britain, the old citizens are sent to homes to leave with other aged people and they are looked after by nurses which is taken

care

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of government rather than their family members. I would like to give my point of view in my

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husband and wife go to earn their livelihood and are usually very busy working and children go to s

chools

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school

and are busy i

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with

their education.

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the family does not get much time to spend with their aged member. Considering the medication and

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required of them, they are sent to homes to be taken

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of a very well trained nurse

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usually sponsored by the government as son and daughters may not be available at the time immediately when in emergency.

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all older people require more m

edication but

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they do need a lot of attention and someone to take

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of them. And considering them to be one in the family, it is the duty of their children to take

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of their parents and pay for their medications e

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that the home should be taken

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by the government as they cannot be available in the time emergency and these o

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citizens, we

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country and should be taken

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by the nation itself. It is my opinion that the family is the most close to the aged so the is the responsibility of their children to take

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of their livelihood.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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261 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Aging population
Elderly care
Nursing homes
Social welfare
Intergenerational responsibility
Caregiving
Financial burden
Quality of life
Pension funds
Healthcare policy
Taxation
Subsidies
Private insurance
Long-term care
Sustainability

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