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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
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 other people believe that including Physical
Education
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 classes in schools for all age groups of pupils is of great importance.Some are of the thought that it is better for children to channel most of their
time
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 on more academic subjects.In my own opinion, children should have a balanced
time
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 table which
accomodates
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodates
accommodate
both
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 physical
education
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 and academic lessons.
This
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 essay will look at
both
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 the views and state my thoughts. Sports are very important in the upbringing of a
child especially
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child, especially
 nowadays when there is a reported increased in the rise
of
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in
 obese and overweight pupils in the society.The
cirriculum
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
 of the school should channel adequate
time
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 for pupils to engage in extra curricular activities so that they can exercise their bodies and burn some of the calories
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of
off
 their body.
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,
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other children have talents in different sporting activities which needs to be nurtured and
this
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 can be done through practise
both
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 at home and school.Physical
education
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 should be awarded equal hours as any other taught lessons at school
inorder
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in order
 to help discover each and every
childs
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child's
child
children
 full potential in
both
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acamedic
associated with academia or an academy
academic
 or extra mural activities at their learning centres. Those that hold the belief that academic students are of utmost important than physical
education
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 argue that
,
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,
 sporting activities are only for done for leisure and
therefore
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 should occupy a few minutes of the daily activities of students.They believe that children should focus more of their attention on academic
endeavors
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
 because sporting brings long life injuries
.
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.
Another reason could be because only a few people in life get to survive solely on income from sports so parents strongly urge their kids to make their
time
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 mostly
in
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on
 academics so that they excel well and be able to secure high paying jobs in
future
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the future
. In conclusion
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I strongly believe that physical
education
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 and academic students should be treated equally in schools because children are gifted in different aspects in life.
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