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Human activities have negative effects on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Since the industrial revolution, people
are using
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have been using
have used
 fuel to live and bring the disaster
environment
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 to plants and animals. The number of plants and animals is dramatically decreased by the
dispearling
arising from or marked by despair or loss of hope
despairing
dispelling
 nature
environment
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.
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, the damager of
environment
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 is irreparable, some people still do something to save the
environment
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. It is true that the extinct
species
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 never back our life.
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, Dudu bird has been endangered over 200 years, and no one sees it again. So it is pointless to make a
change
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 for the extinct
species
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.
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, the
change
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 people making for our planet is never too late to save other endangered
species
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. The best way for saving the
species
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 living on our planet is every individual and government working together to improve our
environment
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 and make the
action
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action, such
such
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 as reducing plastic goods, recycle garbage and decreasing pollution from industries. I believe that if All the action of benefit
nature
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nature, environment
environment
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 can keep into the long term plan, the endangered
species
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 will survive in the near future.
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, the climate
change
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 will be controlled and the diversity of animals and plants will be recovered, whenever we make our planet better.
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, some people think that the
change
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 we
making
engage in
doing
 for the
environment
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 cannot bring the extinct
species
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 back, I prefer that improving our
environment
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 to protect the endangered creatures by
government
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the government
 and people together will avoid the disaster to plants and animals.
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