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While some people like to live at home, other people think that living in an apartment has more advantages.

#people #home #apartment
If the living family has too many individuals, the
apartment
 may not be enough for them. But if a few people are going to live, the house may be too big for them and an
apartment
 will be enough. If the people living there are a family who spends more time outside the home, the
apartment
 is just a place for them to eat and sleep, and
that is
 enough for them.
In addition
, heating, security and gardening in the
apartment
 are considerably more convenient than at home, because other people are already doing it for them. People living in the house are more families with more individuals or people with better financial status (
this
 is a factor that can vary from country to country).
For example
; For families with too many individuals, there are not enough rooms in the
apartment
.
Also
, a family with too many people means a very high volume, so if
this
 family lives in an
apartment
, other people may complain about it.
In addition
, gardening, heating and security at home depend entirely on how much responsibility people live there. These problems can turn into big problems if they are not responsible enough. In fact, if we look at it,
this
 event can vary depending on the situation, because it depends on the living conditions and styles of the people who will live there.Their advantages and disadvantages are different. Even, if it is comparable, we cannot choose one as better and the other as bad.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfort
  • familiarity
  • privacy
  • investment
  • customization
  • personalization
  • convenience
  • maintenance
  • security
  • amenities
  • residential complexes
  • surveillance
  • communal areas
  • upkeep
  • modify
  • decoration
  • investment value
  • belonging
  • enhanced security
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