Shopping is now one of the most popular form of leisure activity in many countries for young,adult, what do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Involving in an activity during free

time

is essential as it refresh our minds. Around the world nowadays, among youths, shopping has become a form of free

time

activity. There are pros and cons

for

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this

and

also

the causes are many, which will be described in the ensuring paragraph.

Although

there are many other activities, some choose shopping. It is because they can see many people, and explore different kinds of products. Another reason could be because of not having good relationships to share their feelings.In

such

cases, during a leisure

time

they do not have anyone to share their moments with. So they involve themselves in shopping. People are benefitted by being involved in

such

activities and not into other activities which are harming to others like drinking, smoking and so on. And when we have a lot of

time

we tend to compare and buy products which are of good quality

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However one

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However, one

tends to spend a lot of money while buying things during free hours.And being youngsters they will not know the value of money. Though shopping is a good leisure activity, youngsters should be guided by their parents.

Mon Jan 27 2020

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Shopping is now one of the most popular form of leisure activity in many countries for young,adult, what do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you are selling describe the furniture suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture You should write at least 150 words.