The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
Two
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The two
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charts below indicate how popular
of
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reality
shows and
game
shows
watched
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are watched
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by Australian
in
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of
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ages and genders.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the proportion of women watching
reality
shows significantly overwhelms the those of men
although
female
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females
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watch slightly fewer
game
shows.
On the other hand
,
the
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people
in
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of
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both genders aged above 45 tend to watch television more
regular
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regularly
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than the other groups. In
reality
programmes, nearly 70%
is
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are
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women which
is
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are
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twice as many as the percentage of men who choose
this
genre of
TV
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the TV
a TV
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show.
Nevertheless
, in term of
game
programmes,
male
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the male
a male
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is prone to watch
game
shows and its percentage accounted for 61%, overtaking that
female
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of female
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by merely 1%. As can be seen, the proportion of
reality
show watchers increases steadily from ages 16 to 45 with the lowest figure at just 50% and the greatest percentage, at 68% of the over-45s.
In contrast
, the number of
game
shows watched by 25 to 44-year-olds is
considerably
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considerable
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than
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more than
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the number watched by 16 to
24 year olds
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24-year-olds
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and those over 45.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reality, game with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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