Goverment should spend money no railway rather than roads

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Nowadays, transportation becomes a controversial main issue as a fast and safe transport
system
sustains the development of a country. The government should spend more money on a railway
system
as it would be better to develop
this
track than roads. On the one hand, the advances in rail transportation have driven many factors to
develop
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developed
developing
countries and have certainly contributed to reducing traffic on roads. For, instance, Kereta Rel Listrik and the others product of Kereta Api Indonesia carry hundreds of people and tonnes of goods while road transports carry only
few people
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a few people
or
fewer
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less
amounts of product related to market demand at a time.
Besides
this
, some shuttle train
are
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is
many times faster than private cars and public buses, for similar case Jakarta still on going for developing a new
system
and its called Mass Rapid Train and actually
this
is not included
to
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in
this
category. These improved railways save people’s valuable time every day.
On the other hand
, in some parts of the transportation based on railways and roads. There is a place a condition roads that still has not a good maintain,
also
is not built yet. The reason why
government
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the government
should pay attention to
this
.
For example
, these are so many
cross roads
a community of people smaller than a village
crossroads
in some place like the east of Indonesia, still fall behind because of the
cross roads
a community of people smaller than a village
crossroads
has not a road. It follows that they are could connect to the other people. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I totally agree that governments should build more railroads than roads.
Furthermore
, these are several positive points of developing railroads as it promotes the use of
public transport
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the public transport system
system
.

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