Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child's development. However, other say that things like television or friends have the must important influence on them. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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The factors
affecting a child's development are debatable. Some people
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claim
have claimed
that parents play a vital role in influencing their children, while others think that television or friends are more
influencial
having or exercising influence or power
influential
.
This
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essay will discuss both perspective and provide reasons and examples why both views are important. On the one hand, it is indubitable that parents play a big role
on
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in
a child's development because values are
first
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learned at home.
This
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means that a child's development represents the influence of their parents.
For example
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, in Philippines, children are very close to their parents and they follow the teaching of the elders. In
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a component that is added to something to improve it
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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