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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent days, most of the populace opts to be an entrepreneur
instead
 of being employed in a conglomerate.
This
 is because they want to prove their talent in a creative manner rather than doing a monotonous job. The main demerit of being a businessman is not having the profit or amount throughout the year.
To begin
 with, people not choosing the option to work in a company are to avoid the repetition of their tasks.
That is
 to say that while doing their own
business
 they have the freedom to decide and introduce new technology or ideas to develop their organisation.
In addition
, it helps them to understand the task from the scratch and aids them to overcome all the obstacles to become a successful
person
 in their career.
For example
, my friend has started her own boutique
business
 and she was awarded as "Best Enterpreneur" because of her uniqueness in her materials that attracted the customers.
This
 example proves that self-owned work will enhance a
person
's creative thinking and the way for them to achieve their ambitions.
On the other hand
, the main drawback in self-employment is that it cannot be assured that we will get the best turnover all over the year.
In other words
, there might be a chance for the
business
 to go down and because of that people might suffer to lead their basic
life
.
Also
, that might make them to buy more loans and be in debt for a long time.
For instance
, in India, a
person
 who owns their grocery shop cannot expect the sale or profit everyday but they have to maintain the stock to run the
business
 which might indulge them to get the amount from banks and run their stores.
Therefore
, unlike the employee in a company who get regular salary, people doing their own job will not get the same and that might end up in under-privileged lifestyle. In conclusion,
although
 working in their own shop as a
business
person
 will help them to think in a different way to become a successful entrepreneur and succeed in their
life
 and career, it might
also
 cause some disadvantage in their
life
 by not getting enough amount from their work and that cause them to lead a debt
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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