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People claim that there are more disadvantages of a car than advantages.

#people #car
It is
assertain
discovered or determined by scientific observation
ascertained
 by individuals to be having more unfavourable conditions of using a vehicle than favourable conditions. In my
opinion i
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opinion, I
opinion I
 would disagree with the statement as there are more favourable conditions because it provides a comfortable
travel
 and distance is covered
speedly
with rapid movements
speedily
. The vehicles now-a-days are very
comfotable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 due to comfortable seats and safety features installed on the vehicles. The seats are
comfortable with
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comfortable, with
 proper back and neck support all the seats have a seat belt on the top they are equipped with six to eight airbags. They are equipped with multimedia systems with
screen
Suggestion
a screen
screens
 so that the passengers can watch videos or listen to songs. The distance is covered fast with all the luxuries and speedy
travel
 on
hiways
a major road for any form of motor transport
highways
 which is achieved due to premium tyres and one must not have to take too much time to
travel
 from one place to another.
in
Suggestion
In
 the past when there were no cars the individuals took too much
time even
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time, even
 to buy some items for daily use and
hence
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 was very difficult. To conclude that the use of vehicles have
make
Suggestion
made
 the conditions favourable due to comfortable and fast ride.
Traveling
Suggestion
Travelling
 long distances is not a problem. One can easily without getting tired
travel
 long distances in no time.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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