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10. Talk about a job that helps making the work better place: What the job is? How you learn about it ? Why do you think it helps so much? And explain why do you think it make the world better place.

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There are  thousands of occupations in the world.  Some need professional training,
such
 as nurses, teachers, lawyers;  and ot
her m
any of various alternatives; some other
another
ight only need hand-on training. One
job
 I want to talk about right now is waste collector,
also
 known as re
fuse collector.
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a refuse collector
In Edmonton, they drive a
garbage
 truck on the street around the city to pick up garbages and
then
 deliver them to Ed
monton
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the Edmonton garbage management centre
garbage
 management centre. I started to pay an attention to
this
job
 when I saw them collecting wastes and dump them to the truck from my back yard at the moment when I moved into my current place about five years ago. 
Although
this
job
 dose no
t need 
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doesn't need
professional training, waste collectors are super important to maintain a clean living environment and reduce pollution to our habitant.  Because, as I said above, they pick up non-recyclable waste materials from homes, apartment buildings, and businesses and transport them to the
garbage
 management centre for la
ndfilling.
Every day, there are tons of non-recycling wastes produced by local habitants. Properly dumping them to a
garbage
 processing ce
ntres a
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centre
re crucial to keep li
ving environment c
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the living environment
lean and prevent mice or cockroaches overly growing. All these creatures will transmit contagious diseases, which will place citizens' health into risks.  About 3 years ago, in Edmonton, refuse collectors went on a strike. It took the city government about 1 months to reach the new contract with them. During that pe
riods,
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period
all garbages were accumulated in ev
ery where a
to or in any or all places
everywhere
ll around the city. Along with bad smelling from the
garbage
 bags, all the wastes turned Edmonton into a large
garbage
 centre.
Therefore
, the
job
 of refuse collectors is super important to the human societies.
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