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and IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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Recently, the brain drains of professionals from their developing countries to developed countries is becoming a common practice. In
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 the consequences of
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 shifting and suggest some solutions for
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 burning issue.
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standards, skilled
 persons are trying to move from their developing or underdeveloped
homeys
where you live at a particular time
homes
 for the better wages and living.
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A recent study
Recent studies
 of migration reveals that, plethora of Indian doctors are trying for citizenships and residential status in
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developing
 nations.
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 is all because of the better salary range and the recognition they will get in those places. The consequence of these
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transfers
 is high, as the developing nation loses the skilled ones, they will keep remain as developing only.
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 can lead to the decline in
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the economy
. If the teachers migrate from the developing country, who will teach the children and how can they become skilled professionals? And in
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 cases, they may have to seek foreign aids, which can
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 add up to the burden of their financial crisis. When Bangladesh
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was
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 in need of foreign help, it pulled them into the hell of huge debt. Providing better living conditions and high salary as per their education and experience are the solutions for
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 issue, which can reduce a considerate amount of transferring. If, one gets wages in accordance with
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of them or themselves
their
 profiles, they won’t leave their native. Creating more employment opportunity and better living atmosphere
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 the basic solutions. Inviting foreign investments can create job openings. Accepting and adopting of technologies can improve the living standards.
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, some schools in India have implemented the technology of modern teaching, which has created
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a plethora
 of job opportunities. And,
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 eventually helped and attracted the students, which helped them to learn
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with
 ease. To conclude, draining of skilled persons from
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 and developing countries will leave the nation in darkness. The officials have to take
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action
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 migration in a way which is beneficial to both the professionals as well as for the economy. Adequate endeavour for
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 ablaze are creating work and providing proper salary in accordance
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with
 their experience. I hope that, in future there will be a stage when no one have to leave their hometown, for job search and quality life, except for some kind of emergency.

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