Do you agree/ disagree that parents should forbid their growing children from using smartphones.

Phones help people to communicate with others both near and afar. Apart from being use for communication, phones can be
use
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used
for browsing on the internet. Some people believe that parents should be prohibited growing children from using smartphones, while others don’t. In my own opinion, I believe that parents should forbid their growing kids from using phones. I feel
this
way for a few reasons, which I will explore in for following essay.
First
of all, parents not allowing their growing kids to use smart phones will help their children to concentrate more on their studies. According to the American Society of Psychology, children are easily distracted by the things around them or what they have.
This
could include mobile phones, video games and computers. They advices that to keep children focused, those distractions has to be removed or set aside.
For instance
, my son had a mobile
phone
as a birthday gift. He was thrilled about it, he
hardy
only a very short time before
hardly
let go of the
phone
. My husband allowed him to go to
school
with the
phone
because he wants to be communicating with him everyday to know when his
school
bus gets to the bus stop after
school
hours. After two weeks of using the
phone
we got a complaint from his class teacher. She insisted that she wanted to see his parents,
that is
grades were dropping and he is not concentrating
in
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on
the class. I was furious about the summon, my husband and I resolved to collect the
phone
from him. Unlike, when he had no
phone
his grades were terrific and I never got any complaints from his teacher.
In addition
, guardians deny access to smartphones to prevent young kids from going to sites that would endanger them. Most times, things that are put up on the internet are not censored, and updated. People post things randomly and when kids come across
such
it endangers them.
For example
, my friend’s son uses his phones
everyday
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every day
. He can’t just keep his hands off it. He came across a challenge
on line
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
where people lit sticks and held it in their mouths
.
Accept space
.
He was told that if he does it, he would be regarded as a strong boy. He came back from
school
, took a lighter and lit a stick, held it in his mouth. By the thing he realized the stick with fire fell on his leg, he got burned. My friend was so angry with him because she had to spend money for his treatment.
she
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She
banned him from using the
phone
. All in all, I firmly believe that parents should forbid growing children from using
smartphones
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smart phones
.
This
is because it will make them concentrate more on their studies, and because it will prevent them from going to sites that will endanger them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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